求英语大神指导一下英语作文，感谢万分！

如图，请指出所有不足之处，感谢大神！
还有，我的however是不是用的不对啊，感觉however后应该跟着不好的情况吧？？应该改为哪个？

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作为英语专业的研究生评价一下：1. 第一句语意上，make people who live here 不太恰当，居住在这的人，here 并不明确。2. 第三行，people前不要加the, 3. However, 表示转折，这里并不恰当，可以改成 therefore, 因为雾霾的危害，所以要采取措施。 4. 第五行，problems 要改为单数 5. 最后一段总结，语言冗杂重复。better后不需要加逗号，to prohibit pollution就在protect environment的含义里，去掉，to prohibit pollution such as haze

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我觉得可以用In addtion(另外)，或者是It's time to take measure.(是时候采取行动了)

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