求改一下鄙人的英语作文，急！是要给英国外教看的，不想给中国人丢脸T T，如果加一些高级句子就更好了

Question

题目是说一下你认为中国目前较为严重的问题，并提出解决方法
我的拟题：中国高考问题严重，各方家长牺牲学生的自由时间去补课。
以下是鄙人的英语作文，请大胆修正！
In china,i think the most serious problem is educaton about the university entrance exam.
In 2012,there are 300 thousand students took part in the university exam.In spite of the rate of passing was 75%, there were still a mojarity of people wanting to go to the top school which called "211project" and "985 project",like The Ivy League University in America,represented the top level of the nation.
To achieve this goal,students in high school attend kinds of tutorials,learning marth,english,physics and so on.At the same time,parents are in favour of the activities that their children study in the weekend.For example,my aunt paid 100 yuan per hour of a class generously in order to improve her son's grade.At school,teachers treat stuents seriously at work too.Honestly,students have few free time to do any other things excep study in high school life.
We can't stop thinking about the reason why situation is going like this?Maybe the reason is Study is the only way to make you successful in chinese opinion,if you do not work hard,you will fall behind.
Finally,how the problem can be solved?In fact,many teenagers are sent to aboard to escape the chinese university entance exam in recent years.Also,government have put a new policy into practice called independent recruitment.Headmaster of the college will interview the student,if he or she behaves good enough,he or she can entance the university without exam.

Answer 1

很多问题。有拼写错误，语法错误，还有不符合英文习惯的句型。这些我都给你改了。另外你的文章本身也有问题，没有把你要说的意思讲清楚，如高考的坏处是什么。通篇看到的，是高考的好处。这个需要你自己改，不然就成了我给你代写了。另外你也没提出解决办法，而只是讲了别人如何绕开高考（明白这两者之间的区别么？）。

In china, I think the most serious problem is in education, specifically the university entrance exam.
In 2012, 300 thousand students took part in the university entrance exam. Despite an overall rate of passing of 75%, only a small fraction of people were able to go to the top schools which are called "211project" and "985 project" schools and represent the top level in the nation, similar to the Ivy League Universities in the US.
To achieve the goal of going to the top universities, high school students attend a variaty of tutorials to learn marth, english, physics and other topics. At the same time, parents prefer that their children also study during weekends. For example, my aunt generously paid 100 yuan per hour for a tutorial class in order to improve her son's grade. At school, teachers also demand that stuents work hard. In fact, students have little free time to do any other things except to study in high school.
We cannot stop thinking about the reason why situation has become like this. Maybe the reason is that studying is the only way to make one successful according to chinese view. If you do not work hard, you will fall behind.
Finally, how can the problem be solved? In fact, many teenagers are sent aboard to escape the chinese university entance exam in recent years. On the other hand, the government has put a new policy into practice called independent recruitment. The headmaster of the college will interview the student. If he or she performs well enough, he or she can attend the university without exam.来自：求助得到的回答

Answer 2

在中国，我认为最严重的问题是关于高考教育。
2012，有300000的学生参加大学考试的通过率。尽管是75%，仍然有大部分的人想去上学校“211工程”和“985工程”，像美国的常春藤联盟大学，代表国家的最高水平。
为了实现这一目标，高中学生参加各种学习教程，三月，英语，物理等。同时，家长在孩子学习在周末活动的支持。例如，姨婆付给每一课时100元慷慨地为提高她的儿子的等级。在学校里，老师对待学生认真工作过。老实说，学生很少有空闲的时间在高中生活中其他任何东西除了研究。
我们不能停止对理性思考为什么情况是这样吗？可能的原因是学习是让你在中国看来，成功的唯一途径，如果你不努力工作，你就会落后。
最后，如何解决这个问题？事实上，许多青少年送到国外逃避近年来中国大学入学考试。同时，政府已经把一个新实施的政策称为自主招生。高校校长将面试的学生，如果他或她表现的足够好，他或她可以入学考试的大学没有

Answer 3

education写成educaton
university exam 应该是有s的吧
学科像marth,english,physics 应该都要大写的

Answer 4

开头I大写，教育education，拼写错误。追问

education 没错吖！~ 来来回回检查了好几遍了！

追答

In china,i think the most serious problem is educaton about the university entrance exam.你自己看

追问

请问 那正确的教育 应该怎么拼？

追答

educaton少一个i，应为education