急修改2篇作文语法错误

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帮帮我修改下文章的错误之处,一定不要有语法错误,尽量改的简洁(语法简单,常用的单词).如果你愿意,可以做大的改动.★★★★★

我的名字叫…，今年19岁，现在在校就读中。我的家在烟台，家里有爸爸、妈妈、姐姐和我，我们的家庭很幸福。

我是一个很内向的人，情绪很容易受到外界环境的影响。同时我也很乐于助人。我有很多的朋友，他们给我带来了很多快乐。

我的爱好很广泛，例如：足球、篮球、睡觉、看书、上网、听歌、历史。

1, Introduce oneself ★

I an xxx,19 years old this year,while studing in at school now.My home is in Yantai,there is my family,father,mather,elder sister and i,our family is very happy.
I am a very introversive person,mood is very easy to be influenced
1, Introduce oneself

I am …,19 years old this year, while studying in at school now. My home is in Yantai, there is family, father, mother, elder sister and I, our family is very happy.

I am a very introversive person, mood is very easy to be influenced by external environment. I am very ready to help others too at the same time. I have many friends, they have brought much happiness to me

My hobby is very extensive, for example: Soccer, basketball, sleep, read, surf the Net, listen to song, history

2、My favorite sport★

我最喜欢的体育运动是跑步。在天气很好的早晨跑步，你会感觉到这是多么的舒服、快乐。跑步不仅可以使你的身体保持健康，还可以解除烦恼。在跑步时，你会呼吸到新鲜的空气，整个人会显得很有精神。烦恼自然就没了。我虽然不常去跑步，但是可以足以感受到跑步对人的好处。朋友们，跑起来吧！让我们共同为健康加油！

My favorite sport is running.Run when wearther is great in the morning,you will feel happy and relaxed.Running can make you keep healthy and have fun.When you running,you can feel very relaxing and activing.So you can have fun.Although I hardly ever running,but I can feel running is good at my health.Running,friends!Let us have a healthy baby!

第二篇要求和第一篇相同!根据你的理解和想象,在加20个单词左右!

万分感谢! 正确答案给予200积分.

Answer 1

I am xxx,19 years old this year,studing in school now.

I live in Yantai,there are father,mather,elder sister and me in my happy family.

I am a very introversive person,and my mood are influenced very easily by the environment.I always get ready to help others. I have many friends who have brought much pleasure to me.

I have many kinds of hobbies.For example, Soccer, basketball, sleeping, reading, surfing on the internet, listening to song, studying history and so on.

同学你好哦，：）。
1，study是及物动词又可以是不及物动词，在后面没有宾语的时候不用加in，in+地点是作为地点副词的，而在学校，最好是用at school。
2，there be句型中，be是复数还是单数决定于后面所接的名词，名词是复数的话，就用are。你原文中有一堆名词，是复数，应该用are。
3，be ready for doing 。get ready to do。这样比较好。

As a kind of sport，Running is of my favorite。

How pleasant and joyful if you make running in the morning with a good weather.

Running can help you keep healthy while having fun at the same time.

When you are running, the relaxing and active feeling could make you feel so nice and comfortable, and the fun of it is beyond discription.

You could forget your trouble and feel confident with breathing the fresh air.

Although I seldom run,I could still feel that running is helpful to my health.

My dear friends,Let's run for our health and happiness!

1，Run when wearther is great in the morning,you will feel happy and relaxed.这一句可以在you will 前面加个and，因为一个句子中不能有两个谓语，而原句有run和feel这两个谓语。
2，you can feel very relaxing and activing。这句应该用relaxed，因为relaxing意思为“使……放松的”。relaxed才是主语感到放松。就和exciting表示“令人激动的”，而excited表示“激动的”一样的道理。好好体会哦。这个经常会考到。
3，but I can feel running is good at my health。应该用is good
for。因为be good at表示擅长……。而且，在feel的后面最好加一个that表示一个从句。随便说一句，一篇文章中同一个动词最好尽量不要出现太多次。所以，还是把feel换一个词吧，feel用太多了，分可就不高咯。
呵呵。
同学，祝你学习进步。加油！！！

Answer 2

i'm xxx,19 years old who studying in school now.I live in Yanta with my father、my mother and my sister.We are happiness.
i'm introverted and my mood is easily be influenced governed by outside.And also I'm always ready to help.So I've got a lot of friends who give me a lot of fun.
I have a good few hobbies.For example,football,basketball,sleeping,reading,play computer,listening to the music,history and so on.

My favorite sport is running.If you running in a good weather in the morning ,you'll feel very happy and relax.Running can keeping your health well while having fun.When you're running, you'll pulling fresh air and it can make you feel comfortable.Then you'll without any trouble.Although I don't running often but I can understand that running is good for people's health.Dear friends,let's run for our health together!本回答被提问者采纳

Answer 3

楼主真应该在语法上加把劲了，挺多错误的，建议多读读英文原版书籍
1, Introduce oneself ★

I an xxx,a 19-year-old guy who is still attending school.My house is in Yantai,where I live happily with my father,my mother and my elder sister
I am a very controversial person,and my mood can be influenced very easily by the environment. At the same time, I am also always ready to help others. I have many friends who have brought lots of happiness to me

My hobbies are very extensive: Soccer, basketball, sleeping, reading, surfing on the internet, listening to song, history, etc.

2、My favorite sport★
My favorite sport is running.jogging under the great weather in the morning can make you feel happy and relaxed.Running can help you keep healthy while having fun at the same time. When you are running, the relaxing and active feeling can make you feel so nice and comfortable, and the fun of it can not be expressed in words.Although I hardly ever run ,I can still feel that running is good for my health.Friends!Let us run for our health and run for fun!

Answer 4

1, Introduction of myself

My name is...,I am 19.I study in school now.I live in Yantai. I live happily with my dad,mom and my elder sister.We are very happy.
I am a pretty introversive person,and my mood could be influenced very easily by the environment. At the same time, I always get ready to help others. I have many friends who have brought much pleasure to me.

My hobbies are very abroad: Soccer, basketball, sleeping, reading, surfing on the internet, listening to song, studying history, etc.

2、My favorite sport
My favorite sport is running.How pleasant and joyful if you make running in the morning with a good weather.Running can help you keep healthy while having fun at the same time. When you are running, the relaxing and active feeling could make you feel so nice and comfortable, and the fun of it is beyond discription.You could forget your trouble and feel confident with breathing the fresh air.Although I seldom run,I could still feel that running is helpful to my health.My dear friends,Let's run for our health and happiness!

Answer 5

I am …,19 years old 。 I am studying at school now. I am in Yantai. I have a happy family: my father, my mother, my elder sisiter and I.
I am a very introversive person, mood is very easy to be influenced by external environment. But I am very glad to help others . I have many friends, and they have brought much happiness to me .

My hobby is very extensive, for example: Soccer, basketball, sleep, read, surf the Net, listen to song, history, and so on.

My favorite sport is running.It is a happy thing that having running in the sunny morning,you will feel happy and relaxed.Running can make you keep healthy and have fun.When you running,you can feel very relaxing and activing.So you can have fun.Although I have little running,but I can feel that running is good at my health.Running,friends!Let us have ahealthy.