我给17分
你的表达好多是根据汉语意思直接翻译，语法问题也不少。想写好英语作文除了有词汇量还要复习语法，多看看优秀范文。作文中多用点高级成分，比如定从，非谓语东西，倒装句，强调句，独立主格之类的。
你的表达好多是根据汉语意思直接翻译，语法问题也不少。想写好英语作文除了有词汇量还要复习语法，多看看优秀范文。作文中多用点高级成分，比如定从，非谓语东西，倒装句，强调句，独立主格之类的。
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第1个回答 2016-04-22
条理算清晰，但是一些语法，第三人称等需要注意一下，改掉这些错误，22分应该没问题
第2个回答 2016-04-22
大约16
Today, the Ipad is fashion product, is a lot of young people and pursue it.
The function of the Ipad many, than the average computer phone function more diverse, and easy to carry, can enjoy the pleasure of Internet bring immediate and convenient, this is why many young people pursue causes. In the study, Ipad make learning easier, more convenient, also can broaden the knowledge, and make learning better. But the Ipad itself to the study the negative effects are obviously. Luxury Ipad very easy let students indulge among them, addicted to the game, addicted to comparisons.
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Today, the Ipad is fashion product, is a lot of young people and pursue it.
The function of the Ipad many, than the average computer phone function more diverse, and easy to carry, can enjoy the pleasure of Internet bring immediate and convenient, this is why many young people pursue causes. In the study, Ipad make learning easier, more convenient, also can broaden the knowledge, and make learning better. But the Ipad itself to the study the negative effects are obviously. Luxury Ipad very easy let students indulge among them, addicted to the game, addicted to comparisons.
Ipad is the time high-tech product, in the hope that we can make good use of, play the Ipad really works.
第3个回答 2016-04-22
个人感觉12分，语句不通，语法不对，词组也不对，更不用语境了，你这典型的中式英语
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