假设你是李华 暑假想去一家外贸公司兼职 已写好申请书和个人简历，给

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假设你是李华 暑假想去一家外贸公司兼职 已写好申请书和个人简历，给外教Mr. jenkins 写信，请她帮你修改所付材料的文字和格式

Answer 1

Dear Ms Jenkins,
I am Li Hua, I am writing to tell you something about my plan for the coming summer vacation and I also want you to do me a favor.
In order to get some practical experience, I am planning to take a part-time job in a foreign capital company. I have already finished my job application and personal resume. But this is the first time that I have written an application and the personals resume, so I don’t even know if there are something to pay attention to. So, I’m writing you the letter , hoping you can give me some help. I will be very grateful if you can help me.
Looking forward to your reply. And I’d be really thankful.
Yours,
Li Hua

格式正确，要点全面，语言通顺流畅，很好地完成了写作任务。在开头提出写信的目的，然后具体讲述自己的困难，再提出请求，最后表达自己的感激之情。所以在内容上逻辑性较强。要注意书信格式，包括称呼语，正文以及结束语等。可以先列出要点而且注意将来时现在时和现在完成时的交错使用，语气要委婉礼貌。

申请书和个人简历写的方式：

1，问好；

2，说明写信的原因，提出请求；

3，说明回信时间；

4，表达感谢。

Answer 2

范文（仅供参考）
Dear Ms. Jenkins,
I’m Li Hua and I plan to take a part-time job in a foreign company during the summer holiday. I have already filled in the application form and had my resume ready for it. However, I am not sure about the words and format. Therefore, I am writing to ask for your help and professional advice. Would you please spare some time to read through the materials attached? Would you mind finding out the mistakes in terms of words and format? Besides, I’d like you to correct the mistakes found in the materials. I would much appreciate it if you could do me a favor.
I am looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
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Answer 3

楼主套路好深啊，哈哈哈哈。。。