我这里写了一篇英语小作文 真的需要大家帮我看看修改下 先谢了 也感谢点进来看的人 万分感谢

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我这里写了一篇英语小作文 真的需要大家帮我看看修改下 先谢了 也感谢点进来看的人 万分感谢Dear Zhang Wei
Hi Zhang Wei,I am writing this litter to tell you a good nows.Our university is going to hold a "Chinese Dream " themed art performance at the assembly hall. I would like to express my warmest invitation to you,if you can join us I would be much appreciated.
The activity will begin at ten o'clock in the evening on December 24th.If you need to rehearsal your performance,you can rehearsal in the Table Tennis hall everyday,but I need tell you the Table Tennis hall opening time has changed ,you need ask our university teachers.
If you can join us I would be much appreciated.
Your sincerely
Li Ming

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communion改成communicate
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ask us改成ask our
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role改成roles
can helped改成can help
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