请英语学的好的过来看下这篇英语作文，指出下语法错误~~

Question

请说的全面一点，最好是整篇作文的错误点。要是能提出建议以便我提高就更好了~~~谢谢噢~~~~
Talent-searc show on campus

In recent years, Talent-search show on campus is become the focus of the public concern.More and more students take part in the show and ingore study.NOt only campus is not the place only for study,but also students aren't focus on study.On one hand,These so-called talent-search show cost lots of money,on the other hand,it also changed the air of school.It will produce undirable influence on campus.
All in all,I think it is high time to put an end to Talent-search show on campus.

Answer 1

In recent years, Talent-search show on campus is(has, become本身就是动词) become the focus of the public concern.More and more students take part in the show and ingore(ignore?拼写错误）(加the或their） study. NOt only campus is not(no longer这样更通顺) the place only for study,but also (加the) students aren't focus(为避免重复，改为don't concentrate，fucus是动词，要说don't) on (加their) study.On one hand（这个短语可以去掉，跟后面重复了）,These so-called talent-search show(shows,可数名词复数，跟前面these 对应） cost lots of money,on the other hand,it（they) also changed(change，前面都是用的一般现在时） the air（ atmosphere，气氛，氛围）of (加the）school.It will produce(cause) undirable（不明白是什么意思？） influence on campus.

Answer 2

has become..... on the one hand.....not only, but also 不太明白这句是什么意思，但主语没有统一。时态好像有点问题。。。。

Answer 3

在这个社会，我们的成长这个问题我也没有什么好的解决方法，我只是建议可能有些时态上没有太注意的地方或者语法的错误，自己再修改一下吧 I

Answer 4

In recent years, Talent-search show on campus is the focus of the public concern.More and more students take part in the show so as to ingore study.NOt only campus is not a place for learning anymore,but also students lost their attention in class.
On one hand,These so-called talent-search show cost lots of money,and on the other ,it also changed the air of school.It will produce undirable influence on campus.
All in all,I think it is good time to end the Talent-search show on campus.

Answer 5

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