简单的英语作文，请教各位，请帮忙看一下这个作文有没有什么问题！有点急，谢谢！

Question

In this summer holidays. I went to Hongshan zoo with my mother. It was a sunny day. We went there by subway.
There are many kinds of animals: tigers, lions, monkeys, pandas and many more. The monkeys are lovely. Some were swinging. Some were eating bananas. Some were climbing mountains. They didn’t afraid of people.
The tigers were eating meat. They have big mouth. Their tails are long. The lions are next to the tigers. They are strong. The lions paced the floor of their cages.
Pandas are from Sichuan Province. They like eating bamboos. Some were climbing trees. How cute they are! I love pandas.
We went home at 4 o’clock in the afternoon. It was an exciting trip. I enjoy it very much.
描述动物的时候，是不是应该用一般现在时，描述动物的行为的时候，应该用过去进行时，请问是这样吗？

Answer 1

In this summer holiday. I went to Hongshan zoo with my mother. It was a sunny day. We went there by subway. 这段里面holiday不要用复数，因为是一个summer holiday。

There are many kinds of animals: tigers, lions, monkeys, pandas and many others. The monkeys are lovely. Some were swinging. Some were eating bananas. Some were climbing mountains. They were not afraid of people.这段里面两个问题，many more用法不错改成many others，didn't afraid of用法错误，应该是weren't afraid of

The tigers were eating meat. They have big mouth. Their tails are long. The lions are next to the tigers. They are strong. The lions paced the floor of their cages.
Pandas are from Sichuan Province. They like eating bamboos. Some were climbing trees. How cute they are! I love pandas.
We went home at 4 o’clock in the afternoon. It was an exciting trip. I enjoyed it very much.这里enjoy要用过去时

描述动物的时候是用一般现在时，描述行为的时候也确实用过去进行时，所以你的时态没有问题。追问

非常感谢！

追答

不客气~

Answer 2

只有些小问题：
1.第一句holiday去掉s.
2.第二段最后一句，didn't改成weren't
3.第三段第一句，mouth加s.
4.第三段最后一句：paced on the...加介词。最好与上文保持一致，用were pacing on the ....

总得来说，你的时态用得还是比较好的。你用得对，但是问题补充说得不恰当。不是所有的“动物行为”都用一般现在时，正如文中，一般的、习惯的行为用一般现在时，而你去当天看到的行为用过去时。

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请问下many more 用法对吗？

追答

不对，我刚才没看到。很抱歉。many不能用来修饰比较级，可以用much。There are many kinds of animals: tigers, lions, monkeys, pandas and much more（kinds of animals）.

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Answer 3

This summer holiday, I went to Hongshan Zoo with my mother. It was a sunny day. We went there by subway. There were many kinds of animals: tigers, lions, monkeys, pandas and many more. The monkeys were lovely. Some were swinging. Some were eating bananas. Some were climbing trees. They weren't afraid of people. The tigers were eating meat. They have big mouth and their tails are long. The lions were caged next to the tigers. They are strong. The lions were pacing the floor of their cages. Pandas were cute. They were from Sichuan Province. Some were eating bamboos. Some were climbing trees. How cute they were! I love pandas.
We went home at 4 o’clock in the afternoon. It was an exciting trip. I enjoyed it very much.

Answer 4

holiday需要加复数形式么Hongshan zoo是不是红山动物园 既然是牌子应该Z也要大写的吧kinds of的意思是多种多样的 前面那many的意义何在、、many more感觉怪怪的，把前面说过的也包括进去了吧I enjoy it very much. 是不是改成I‘m enjoy it追问

谢谢！

Answer 5

把 many more 改成 so on monkey stigers lions前的the 去掉 they aren't afraid 不是didn't lions are placed on the floor of....追问

谢谢！

Answer 6

是的，这篇作文很好，你是现在在描述动物，是用一般现在时，它们做的动作是已经过去了，用过去时。追问

谢谢！

追答

No thanks.

Answer 7

这样没什么问题吧！！~~~