写了一篇简单的英语作文，请大家看看有什么语法错误和一些不好的地方，指出并说明原因。3Q！！！

Hello,everybody!My name is Lucy.I'm thirteen years old .I'm going to middle school in September.I like playing badminton and watching TV.But I like reading books best. I read books every day.I read <Alice Adventures in Wonderland>and the other magazines in Summer Holiday.There're five people in my home.My parents,grandparents and I.This Monday,we went to Changzhou.We feel very happy.

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推荐答案 2013-08-19

“I'm going to middle school in September” in 改成this 表示今年九月我就读初中啦

"I like reading books best" best 不对，应用most，这里表达的是比较之中的最高级。

“the other magazines”， the other是特指，但是后文有没有列明具体书名，所以应用泛指，改成“some other magazines”

“in Summer Holiday” in 改成during，因为是一段时间内。

“There're five people in my home” home改成family，home表示的是家，但是family表示家庭，跟后面比较相比配

“There're five people in my home.My parents,grandparents and I” 第二句是对第一句中5 people的展开描述，所以这两句表达一个完整语义，应该是一句话。将第一句的句号改成逗号。

“This Monday,we went to Changzhou” 英语习惯与中文不同，状语应该在后，所以应该改成“We went to Changzhou this monday”

"We feel very happy" 改成 “we were very happy” 更加自然，符合一般习惯

很多不是语法问题，是英文的习惯，所以楼主可能需要多看一下原文书籍，熟悉一下就好啦。

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第1个回答 2013-08-19

in my home我认为应该为in my family
其他应该对的
不懂再问哦
我一直都在
别的也可以私聊问哦追问

是哦是哦，怪不得我一开始读起来感觉特别别扭

追答

嗯嗯，好好学哦，英语很有用的哦！
采纳我呗

第2个回答 2013-08-19

1. in Summer Holiday 改为 in the summer holiday.--没必要大写。加定冠词。普通名词大写就变成了专有名词。
2. in my home 改为 in my family--因为指的是你的家庭成员。
3. This Monday 改为 Last Monday--所指的周一已经过去。
4. feel 改为 felt 是指去广州我们都感到高兴。

第3个回答 2013-08-19

A personal introduction that you should establish administrative levels feeling.And all the most important is
pithily written.So you can rewrite the article on the basis of the two recommendation.

第4个回答 2013-08-19

。。。。。watching TV.But I like reading books best.。。。。。在英语中but表转折，但这里用太牵强了，改成while更合适些
。。。。。。.I read <Alice Adventures in Wonderland。。。。。。与上一句的衔接不是太好，在这一句前加一句，by the way（顺便说一句）更通顺些
There're five people in my home 一般大家都用的family
We feel very happy既然去广州是过去发生的事（went)那这里是不是也该换成felt而不实feel呢？

第5个回答 2013-08-19

第四句应该是I'm going to go to middle school in September

. summer holiday应该不用大写

There're five people in my hom换成family,后面换成逗号，I改成me，或者把下一句改成They are my parents,grandparents and me.

望采纳哦~

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