The Internet makes the world smaller.英语作文。求思路就行。自己写的批改网说文章内敛性不够好。
可以帮我完善一下吗…拜托了
追答亲,你截得屏太大,我在手机上看不清呦
追问那我怎么发给你??
追答屏幕截小一点我试试看,不好意思哦,因为我现在正在上课所以没办法帮你,不知道你急不急,只能晚上帮你完善⊙﹏⊙
追问发给你了。好的,拜托了!!
追答改错网说的内敛性不好,意思是,中心不够明确,我看了你的文章,似乎全文都在描述的人们的沟通信息便捷了,应该从多角度考虑,下面是一些观点,你看一下,仅作参考
With the arrival of the knowledge economy age, Internet, as a new media, has come into our life. Nowadays, getting on line and surfing the Internet for information has become popular in China, especially among college students and teachers. Why is Internet getting so popular in such a short time?
The popularity of Internet results from its great convenience and easy accessibility to information. Thanks to the Internet, a world of information is just a click away. E-mail is another contributing factor to its popularity. It can transmit your letter quickly, safely and accurately. Besides, Internet has some other uses. Doctors may use it to diagnose and treat their patients by discussing or exchanging experiences with doctors in other parts of the world. Students may obtain new knowledge from a national long-distance educational system via Internet. Finally, businessman can conduct E-commerce or E-business on the net.
With so many uses and advantages, there is no doubt more and more people will be wired to the Internet-the information expressway. In short, with its high speed and efficiency, Internet will be more popular in China in the near future.
这是你自己写的吗…
追答不是,只是给你提供几个观点
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