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Question

我是一个中学生,英语作文一直不太好,这里有一篇,拜托各位帮我看看
After six day's study,I'm very tired .tomorrow is National day,so I want to have a very easy vacation. i plan to visty me friends in hangzhou. i'm going over there on Octomber first. I can go shopping and see the movies with my friends . I'm stanying for three days . Becayse I don't like going away for too long . Do you like going fishing? We are going fishing and do other thing .At night ,we are renting and sleeping a lot. I hope I have a good time.
大家帮我看一下,有什么不足和错误的.拜托你们了.谢谢

Answer 1

I feel really tired after my 6 days'study.Luckily,tomorrow is our National Day so that I can have a 7-day relaxing vacation.Well,for me I am planning to visit my friends in Hangzhou and I will be there on October 1st.I am so excited that I will go shopping and see some movies with my friends there.(I just can't help thinking of going shopping and seeing some movies there with my friends.)Because I don't like going too far away from home ,I will just spend 3 days down there.By the way,do you like going fishing?haha,I am going to go fishing!And I guess I would also do a lot of funny things,such as renting and sleeping at night by the lake .I just can't wait!And I hope myself have a really good time!
其实你写得挺好的，我跟你写得也差不多~~
你就好啦~~有假放，我高三了，才放3天，今天晚上又要回学校了~~命苦啊~~~ ^_^'

Answer 2

1."After six day's study"中"day's"改成"days".
2."I'm very tired "改成"I was very tired"
3."plan to visty "中的"visty"改为"visit"
4."me friends "改成"my friends "
5."in hangzhou"改成"to hangzhou"
6."i'm going over there on Octomber first"最好删去,没太大得用.
7."Becayse"写错了
8."going fishing"删去"going"
9."We are going fishing "删去"going"
10."other thing "改成"another things"
11."I hope I have "改成"I hope I will have"
12."we are renting and sleeping a lot."这一句是啥意思啊,该删就删掉吧.
我就大体看了一下先改这么多吧,你最好先写成汉语再翻译一下,作文和汉语作文一样的.慢慢写会好的,加油啊,努力吧.

Answer 3

After six day's studing,I'm very tired . Tomorrow is the National Day, so I want to have a very simple vacation.I planed to visit my friends in hangzhou.I will go there on October the first.I will go shopping and see the movies with my friends .I will stay there for three days.Because I don't like going away for too long. Do you like fishing?We will go fishing and do other things.At night,we will renting and have a good sleep.I hope I will have a good time.

Answer 4

After studying for six days, I am very tired. Tomorrow is National day, so I want to have a very relaxing vacation. I plan to visit my friends in Hangzhou. I will go there on October 1st. I may go shopping and see movies with my friends. I will stay there for three days. Because I don't like to go away for too long. Do you like to go fishing? We will go fishing and do some other things too. At night, we will rest and sleep a lot. I hope I will have a good time.