关于美国签证问题

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复读的原因：我想通过复读加强我的英语口语能力，我会更好的适应美国学习生活，也会为今后的学习以及海外生活打下急促。
I want to improve my English spoken language ability through study again , and I may better adapt US’s study life , will build the foundation for the overseas life as well as the study. So , I choose to study again.
回来的理由：第一，我的兴趣是软件设计。我想有一个属于我自己的公司关于游戏、音乐软件。中国的软件市场正处于开始阶段，有更多的发展空间。第二，我想回来跟父母在一起。
Frist , my interest is the software design. I want to have my own software development company about games , music software. China’s software market is at the beginning , can have the more development space. Second , I want to come back live with my parents. Therefore , I do want to come back.
选择美国的原因：第一，美国是一个自由民主的国家。我是一个开朗、向往自由的人。我喜欢自由。第二，我的兴趣是软件设计。美国有世界上最好的软件开发公司，比如微软，IBM、苹果公司。我想有个自己的公司像这些公司一样。我相信在美国的学习可以帮助我今后的发展。
Frist , US is a free democracy country. I’m a open and bright , yearns for the free person. I like the freedom very much. Second , my interest is the software design. US has the best software development company in the world , such as Microsoft , IBM , Apple company. And I want to have my own company like these. I believe my study in US would help my further development. Therefore I choose the US.
选择该校的原因:第一，这是一个美丽的学校坐落在佛罗里达州，有着很漂亮的校园，美丽的学习环境，生动的教学方式以及先进的设施。第二，这所学校有很多课外活动和社团。我喜欢化学社团。我喜欢做实验。这个非常有趣。我也喜欢挑战自己。
Frist, it’s a nice school located in Florida , with very beautiful campus , lovely studying environment , vivid teaching method and advanced facilities. Second , the north broaward school has many activiities and clubs. I like Chemistry Club and like performing the experiment. It's very interesting. And I like challenging myself. So , I choose the NBPS.
为什么不在中国选择该课程？ 美国教育注重学生的个方面能力。除了学习，美国高中也会通过课外活动培养个人能力，比如人际交往，社会能力以及领导能力。而中国更注重成绩。忽略了学生的个人能力。
The American teaching pays great attention to raise student’s various aspect ability. Expect academic study , American high school also raises student’s personal ability through the rich activities , such as the human communicate , social ability , as well as the leader can manage. However , the school of China focus more on students scores and neglect student’s personal ability.

我写的 我是去读高二 大家帮我改改 谢谢

Answer 1

我只改了一些，也有很多不知道该怎么写。
提一些建议：
1.不要先写中文再翻译成英文，学会用英语去思考。先写中文到翻译会不会翻会很麻烦。
2.说“我想要”的时候，要说“I'd like to”，说“I want”很生硬，而且不是很礼貌。
3.美国这个词要写成“the U.S.”
4.不一定要用多深的词汇，如果用很难的词，有时候美国人是听不懂的。

I'd like to improve my oral English ability through study again, and I could adapt to the U.S.’s life better and will make a good foundation of the overseas life. So, I choose to study again.

First,I interested in software design. I'd like to have my own games or music software development company. Software market in China is at the initial stage,it has more development space. Second, I'd like to come back and live with my parents. Therefore, I do want to come back.

First , the U.S. is a free and democratic country. I’m a open, bright, and yearns for free person. I like freedom very much. Second, I interested in software design. The software development company in the U.S. are the best, such as Microsoft, IBM, Apple company. And I'd like to have my own company like those. I believe the study in the U.S. could help me in the future. Therefore I'd like to go to the U.S..

Frist, it’s a nice school located in Florida with a very beautiful campus, a lovely studying environment, and a vivid teaching method and advanced facilities. Second, the North Broaward school has many activiities and clubs. I like Chemistry Club and performing the experiment. It's very interesting. And I'd like to challeng myself. So , I choose the NBPS.

In American, people pays a great attention to raise student's various aspect ability. Expect academic study, American high school also raises student's personal ability through the rich activities, such as the human communicate, social ability, and the leadership. But, the school in China focus more on students scores and neglect student’s personal ability.

Answer 2

如果你这是为签证面试准备的问题
你不用写这么多。。。我也去美国读高二。。。。刚办完签证。。。签证官不会听你说那么久的。。。一个人也就一、两分钟
以下是他问我的问题：
你去美国干什么？
为什么选择你申请的学校？
谁为你付钱？
有没有亲戚在美国？（千万别说有！！）
再就没什么了。。。千万别让他听出你有移民倾向就行