请帮我看一下这篇英语作文有没有错误。

You used to study really hard.And got grades pretty good.You had many great ways to study,such as making card, listening to tapes,asking teacher for help,study with a group.At present,You are changed.You don't do homework anymore.You would rather play computer games than read interesting books. I think playing computer is bad for your health,and it could make you get tired.What can you do to realx yourself?Ithink you can taking a walk in a park,going to a concert or a museum.
15分会扣掉几分? You had many great ways to study, such as making card, listening

额,老天,低年级那。初中水平差不多。

第二行:study换成studying(such as+doing)
第二行:You are changed——你被改变,不太合适。应为自己主动改变,改为You change
第五行:can taking改为can take,going to a concert 改为 go to a concert (can后面加一般现在时)
这要看评分标准了,还有改卷的严格程度
初中,那还不错哦,应该扣3、4分左右。
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第1个回答  2010-11-12
至于错误,楼上已经解答了!不过我说说对你的作文的看法
1。你的作文读起来没有一点连贯性!逻辑顺序太差!.
2。没有文采,好的词汇和短语没有几个!最严重的是全是简单句,连接上很差!
当然我不知道你念几年级,如果是初学者,那么已经足够了!以后写得多了就好了!但如果是高年级的,那么我就实在不敢恭维啦!
如果我是老师,最多给一半分!
第2个回答  2010-11-12
第一行: and 理论上不能做句首词的,你这句打了前面打了句号那就是没主语.and前面打分号可以
第二行: listening to tapes, >listen to tapes.
第三行: dont > didn't
嗯 ,,第六行,can +take... 情态动词后面加动词原型
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