帮我看看我写的英语作文有哪些语法错误！？

Question

my hobby
I want to tell you about my hobby. I collect shoes .I have benn doing since I was 13. my friend know i like NBA very much. so i always run out of my money to buy shoes and now i have 20 pairs of them .

the first one i ever got a pair of new shoes .it was cool and it called"NO.1 kobe" just a month i bought another shoes

it was good-looking and cool it calls "NO7.T-MAC" now i ever store them in boxes under my bed

my mother says i have to stop because they are very dear
she doesn't wand to buy for me any more

but i see. i have to stop because i run out of my money and my room to story them!!

Answer 1

I want to tell you about my hobby. I collect shoes（改成I like collecting shoes更好）.I have benn（是been） doing（加 this） since I was 13. my friend know（knows） i like NBA very much. so i always run out of my money to buy shoes and now i have 20 pairs of them .

the first one（改成time） i ever（删去ever） got a pair of new shoes .it（合并成一句，删去.it） was cool and it called"NO.1 kobe" just a month (加after)i bought another shoes

it was good-looking(改成nice，good-looking是形容人的） and cool （加，）it calls "NO7.T-MAC" .now i ever（改成have） store（改成stored） them in boxes under my bed

my mother says i have to stop because they are very dear
she doesn't wand（是want） to buy for me any more

but i see. i have to stop because i run out of my money and my room to story（是store） them!!

Answer 2

my hobby
I want to tell you my hobby. I collect shoes .I have benn doing so since 13. my friend know i like NBA so much that i always run out of my money to buy shoes ,and now i already have 20 pairs of them .

the first one i've ever got was a pair of new shoes .it was cool and was called"NO.1 kobe" .just a month later i bought another pair.

it was good-looking and cool which was called "NO7.T-MAC" .now i always store them in boxes under my bed .

my mother says i have to stop doing so.because they are so expensive that she doesn't want to buy me any more .

and i see. i have to stop because i run out of my money .besides,i have no room to story them!!

Answer 3

第2行的最后一个单词是been
第6行，shoes是复数，要用ones，而且你的 “I ever got是定语从句，因此缺少了主句的谓语动词，加个are，最后连着第7行，要加个was，是was called，是我们叫作，不是它自己叫它自己的名称
第7行，是another pair of shoes，在这里，你的意思很牵强，不清楚的老师，还以为你出错了，第8行还是老毛病

第9行的stop后面加个that.第10行，buy是及物动词，要加shoes，最后一行你打错字了，是store