帮我改错（英语作文）谢谢！！

Question

All Roads Lead To Rome
As all roads lead to Rome.It is not sensible to focus on one thing,especially on which lots of people focus.The wider a road is,the more people is who walk up the road.Thus,all you need is a way that you just interested in.And there is warning that don't being judge just by the way others look.

Now look at Arnold Schwarzenegger.We all know he is a famous Hollywood movie star.However,he has been a dreamer of president since he was a boy.His method,unexpectedly,to achieve purpose is getting worldwide fame.And he is really a state master today.

In a word,all roads lead to Rome.

Answer 1

1、正文第二行，“The wider a road is,the more people is who walk up the road”改成“The wider one road is,the more people can walk on it”.
2、“Thus,all you need is a way that you just interested in”这句改成“Thus,finding a way which you are interested in is just what you need to do”.
3、“And there is warning that don't being judge just by the way others look”改成“Besides, there is a warning that you should not judge a way in others' view”.
4、"a dreamer of president "改成“a dreamer of becoming a president ”。
5、“His method,unexpectedly,to achieve purpose is getting worldwide fame.”改成“His key to success,unexpectedly, is getting worldwide fame.”
我只是把我认为不妥的地方改了，希望对你有所帮助~！

Answer 2

1,题目里面to应该小写
2，汗 后面写作尽量用简单句吧 我觉得好作文应该是让人一看就懂的，估计是我水平不够，看着累 呵呵