英语的自我介绍，考研复试的。

Question

Goodafternoon, my dear teachers. I’m very glad to have this honor to take thisinterview.
Myname is XXX,22 years old this year. I come from the father of modern China—Sunyet-sen 's hometown—中山.
Myundergraduate period will be accomplished in 四川 universitywhere I major in management science . First grade. I start anundertaking in the first semester andthe result is not bad.
So I speculate in the stock market in thesecond semester but the result is terrible.
Afterthat, find out the trace of my money become myinterest run through my college life.
Secondgrade. I learn Japanese independently and pass the JLPT(TheJapanese-Language Proficiency Test)Level 1 with 121 point which level 1 is the most difficult level in this test.
And Iuse Japanese instead of English in the preliminary test.
Thirdgrade. After joining the GMC(Global Management Challenge) competitionin the first semester,
I join the CFA(Chartered Financial Analyst) level1 test for the reason of learning finance systematically
And passthe test in June last year.
After thatI realize that I'm too young too naive I must take part in the postgraduateentrance exams so that I can have a deeper understanding of finance.
Fourthgrade. I spend half a year for the entrance test.
Andprepare my Graduation thesis which is about a Financialrisk model in the last semester.
So that’s all, Thank you forgiving me such a valuable opportunity!
我考研用的日语，现在要准备英语的口语自我介绍，英语半年没碰，已经霉烂。求批改。

Answer 1

　　Good afternoon, (dear Madam and Sir). I’m very glad to have this honor to take this interview.
　　My name is XXX, 22 years old this year. I come from Sun yat-sen’s hometown Zhongshan City, (where the father of modern China was born).
　　My undergraduate period is coming to an end) in Sichuan University, where I major in management science.
　　(When I was a freshman,) I (used to start) an (business undertaking in my spare time) in the first semester and the result is not bad, (and therefore, affording to take chances), I (risked to) speculate in the stock market in the second semester, (and unfortunately), the result is terrible. After that, (I found that) the trace of my money (becomes) my interest (to) run through my college life.
　　(As a sophomore), I (taught myself Japanese) and (passed) the JLPT (The Japanese-Language Proficiency Test) Level 1 with 121 point, (which) is the most difficult (one of it ). (As a result), I (was able to use) Japanese in the preliminary test instead of English.
　　(I succeeded in ushering my junior). After joining the GMC (Global Management Challenge) competition in the firstsemester, I (participated in) the CFA (Chartered Financial Analyst) level 1 test for the reason of learning finance systematically and (passed it) in June last year. After that, I (have realized) that I'm too young (and) too naive, I must take part in the postgraduate entrance (examination) so that I can have a deeper understanding of finance.
　　(Now, my college senior is about to end). I (plan to) spend half a year (preparing) the entrance test while writing my Graduation thesis on Financial Risk Model in the last semester.
　　That’s all, Thank you for giving me such avaluable opportunity!

　　【附注】
　　1、dear teachers 属于中式英语，礼貌场合最好用 dear Madam and Sir
　　2、大学x年级最好分别用 freshman,sophomore, junior, senior
　　3、讲述的基本都是大学各年级的事情，应该用过去时表示。
　　4、其他修改之处都放在括号里面。

Answer 2

我自己在ABC天卞口语学了.好.一段时间，时间安排由我们自己定，在家上课随时可以跟外教学口语，感觉他们那里的教学模式还是有一定的独到之处的，建议你做选择的时候多比较下。这位兄台相比已经面过了吧？我么的经历和你的想法一致，先简单概括一下自己的况情，然后等教授们逐个提问，一问一答，互动性好，不比你一个人，滔滔不绝，表面看来准备充分，从实际效果来看，老师问的，没有问的，都说出，有自我SHOW的成分在里面了。祝楼主好运！

Answer 3

Good afternoon everyone. I’m glad to take this interview with you. This is my pleasure.
My name is XXX, and i'm 22 years old this year. I came from the “father of modern China”（我不太确定这个语法是不是对的）—Sunyet-sen 's hometown—中山.
My undergraduate period will be accomplished in 四川 university. My major is management science . I am working very hard in the first semester and the result is pretty good.
But I am slacken in the stock market in the second semester and the result is terrible.
After that, i find out the trace of my money become my interest run through my college life.
At the Second grade. I study Japanese independently and pass the JLPT(TheJapanese-Language Proficiency Test)Level 1 with 121 point which level 1 is the most difficult level in this test. And I use Japanese instead of English in the preliminary test.
In the Third grade which After i joining the GMC(Global Management Challenge) competition in the first semester, I join the CFA(Chartered Financial Analyst) level1 test for the reason of learning finance systematically, and i passed test in June last year.
After that I realized that I'm too young and too naive, I must take part in the post graduate entrance exams so that I can have a deeper understanding of finance.
In the Fourth grade. I spend a year and half (你想说一年半么？） for the entrance test and prepare my Graduation thesis (thesis? 如果是论文的话就是essay， 没人说thesis, 要么是thesis statement ）which is about a Financialrisk model in the last semester.
That’s all, I am appreciate you for giving me a such valuable opportunity!
我小改了下你看下行不行，毕竟我不是学管理的， 你看下意思对不对. 至少不会磕磕碰碰的感觉.

Answer 4

Answer 5

作为一个过来人，我给您提几条参考建议： 首先，你要搞清自己想要读研的目的何在。多数人都认为其目的是找一份好的工作，既然如此，若本科毕业能够找到理想的工作，可以考虑先工作几年，等想充电的时候再读研也不迟。如暂时没找到合适的工作，不妨考虑先读研。 其次，你要考虑好自己的实力，毕竟考研和找工作会有些冲突。如果认为自己有足够的实力，不妨作一个两手准备，在考研的同时兼顾找工作。 最后，我想家庭的经济势力也是自己应该考虑的一个方面。如果经济状况不允许，还是先工作较好。 希望以上几条建议能够给您以帮助