才70分
可以再加一点吗谢谢,还有要分段。
这是一个同学的范文
What kind of office could be called "idea"?
Well, in my opinion,firstly, an office much be bright enough because the sunshine and light can bring you a good mood for the whole day and cheer you up if you are upset caused by the annoying affairs.
Secondly, an office must have nice colleagues who are kind and sincere, because you can not imagine how to get along with "Poker faces" for eight hours in the daily life and the harmoneous atmosphere will bring you happiness and make your work more efficient.
Thirdly, the office must have some plants to decorate, not only they will help to deal with the carbon dioxide, but also bring the oxygen.
This is the perfect office to me.
算了,你写的还不如我改的高呢,不过还是谢谢了。
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