小伙伴们一起来看看英语栏目的我为大家带来的“BEC写作范文及模版: 非正式邮件”吧~希望对大家有所帮助哦!
首先看一篇非正式邮件~
要求:You are on holiday in London. Write an email to your friend Sarah telling her how you are spending your time.
Sarah’s email address is [email protected] You should write between 320 and 350 words.
To: [email protected]
Subject: London [1]
Hi,
How are you?[2] I’m having a wonderful time here and wish that the holiday will go on forever. Guess where I am at the moment![2] Well[2], I’ve found an internet Café just round the corner from our hostel and I grabbed the opportunity to email you and tell you how I’ve been spending my time here in London.
I’ve[3] been ever so busy the few days I’ve been here trying to visit all the interesting places. On Monday I visited Madame Tussaud’s. This is a waxwork museum. There was such a long queue to enter. Luckily our leader had booked the tickets beforehand. It was so wonderful seeing all those wax figures of so many famous people!
I’ve also visited the Houses of Parliament and Westminster Abbey, two other famous landmarks in London. Tomorrow we’re going on the London Eye, also known as the Millennium Wheel. This is a giant wheel that was built to celebrate the millennium in the year 2000. There are so many other places to visit. But we don’t just visit museums and other interesting places. In the evening we usually go to a pub where young English people gather for a drink. It’s fantastic meeting English people. I’ve been practising my English all along. I’m no longer self-conscious when I’m speaking in English and I’ve come to the conclusion that the best way to learn a language is to visit the country where it’s spoken.
One of the other things I’ve enjoyed is visiting Hyde Park. This is one of the many parks around London. Many people go there for walks and to relax. However, what’s interesting about this particular park is the Speaker’s Corner where anyone is free to make speeches about any topic! We saw many different types of people making some very strange speeches!
I hope you’ll have the opportunity to visit London some day. It’s such an exciting place to be! I’m having so much fun!
Time’s up! Say hi to all the others.[4]
See you soon.
Debbie
[1]非正式信函的主题(Subject),和SMART原则要求的不同,SMART原则更为读者考虑,因此也更为正式一些;但是如果对方的邮箱总是充满了很多邮件,用一个言简意赅的主题也不错,比如这里,对方应该是知道Debbie现在身处伦敦,所以只消写一个词对方便知道邮件的内容。不过,对方如果不是比较亲密的朋友,或许再具体一点也是不错的,比如:Holiday in London。
[2]这里的几句话都是更倾向于口语的,能够清晰表达写信人的心情。同时,整个信件用了很多感叹号,说明写信人非常激动。这两点在偏正式信函中比较少见(虽然Shirley在她《商务英语写作实例》中强调,现在的信函更倾向用日常的语言,包括口语,但是过于口语的内容,比如缩写(FYI)、俚语等等都会尽量避免。)。
[3]信函中用了很多I,因为信函的目的在于介绍(introduction)自己的假期,没有特别需要征求对方意见,涉及对方利益关系的内容,因此没有特别从对方的角度考虑。如果信函是写给新的顾客,信函的语气,包括You,we的大量使用和对方的利益关系则需要多加考虑。
[4]最后的结尾用了比较亲和的短语。这也符合非正式文体的氛围。没有任何违和的感觉。
[5]最后一点,虽然为非正式文体,邮件的结构也非常清晰。因此我们可以得知,不管是书写怎样的邮件(当然,文学中的意识流之类的内容除外,虽然意识流或许也是有逻辑的),为了方便读者获取重点信息,邮件都务必要简短而清晰。每一段涉及的内容固定,并且句子的长短也应适当,不要使用过长的句子(run-on sentences)。
再来一篇~
要求:You would like to invite your friends over to your house for a party. Write the email. Your friends’ addresses are [email protected] [email protected] [email protected] [email protected] and [email protected] . You should write between 60 and 80 words.
来试一试~
Sample
to: [email protected] ; [email protected] ; [email protected] ; [email protected] ; [email protected]
subjectz: Party
Hi everyone,
Great news! Do you remember the other day we were saying someone should organise a party? Well, now’s the time! How about coming over thisSaturday? We can have a party on the roof. I just need to know who’s bringing what, because I’m not much of a cook(我的厨艺不怎样). So, let me know what you can offer. I’ll take care of the drinks myself.
Hope that most of you can make it. Write back soon!
Jessica